I am a Year 7 student at Pt England School in Auckland, NZ. I am in Class 4 and my teacher is Ms Squires.
Hi Nikki, I liked your writing, but I think that you have added the same information into the same paragraph!!! There is also quite a bit of repetition in your writing such as, 2012 and Ceremony. Maybe you could fix this up and then I can read it again to see how you have improved.Love you Lots, Chante